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I really enjoyed this part.
I wasn't surprised to see that Hawkins had taken off to find his family for a couple of reasons. The first reason is Hawkins need and desire to reconnect with his family that was evident in the show. The second reason is that Jake was the only personal connection that Hawkins had in town. Without Jake there he didn't become involved in any of the town issue that he did with Jake there.
I like how you portrayed Darcy as the smart person she is here. I don't think that Hawkins could have made a better choice in deciding to use his tracking device to find his family. I am happy that he made the decision to put his family above his 'work' here. I think he made the right choice for himself, despite it not being the best choice for Jericho.
I really like Skylar's take on Gray in this part, how he only cared about what was important to him. From Gray's perspective I think that things got out of control so quickly that he had to focus on only the few things he could control like the salt mine, even if it as detrimental to the town he was supposed to run.
I do have to say I like how wise Skylar the freedom fighter! I think her experiences in your story were like a rite of passage for her. I have to say that I think that she is one person who became a better person in this story. I think that Jake had the least impact on Skylar in the 'real' Jericho so his absence in his 'dream' world had the least impact on her so I'd like that Skylar the freedom fighter is what Skylar will become one day in the 'real' Jericho.
Nice job!
Thanks, Skyrose!
You're very right about Hawkins. His family means so much to him, and he had not become connected to this obviously floundering town in this universe. He knew he couldn't change it on his own and he had more important things to fight for, in the big picture, as well as his smaller picture, his family. He certainly didn't regret his choices here, and did what he needed to do. Darcy also did what she needed to do. She is very smart, and I'm glad you liked her mention here. Though she doesn't appear, her choices had an effect on this world, and, were the choices that were right for her and her family.
I like your take on both Skylar and Gray here. They did fall on opposite sides of a spectrum, I think, and I hoped both would be understood, even if Gray's actions are not especially honourable. Though he made mistakes, he did try his best and was devastated to find himself failing.
Skylar the freedom fighter was very fun to write. She definitely became strong in a way Jake has never seen her before, though, alone and desperate as she is, she may be just as doomed as the characters who have given up the fight. Hopefully though, Jake sees her potential here and remembers it in the real world.
Thanks for your comments!
Okay, first I have to gloat a little... Skylar was my main, number one suspect for Mystery Graffiti Artist. She was just not as beat down as the rest, and she seemed ridiculously interested in Jake's return.
I love what you've done with Skylar, who actually changed even more for the better (imho) in this version of Jericho than she did in the "real" one. I hope she makes it, but for some reason I suspect that she will go down in a blaze of glory, in whatever happens next. But at least she'll go down fighting.
As for the Hawkinses, I was interested in seeing how Rob reacted to Jake, but I am not disappointed. I think you got this exactly right. With everything that went wrong in this Jericho, without Jake to recognize something in Hawkins and vice versa, without their wary, suspicious dance of a relationship that somehow became a friendship, I don't see Hawkins becoming invested in the town. So, if Darcy and their kids left, he would definitely go after them. And may I just say, you described a brave, decisive, planning Darcy that I completely appreciate and totally buy.
Lastly, I thought your commentary on Beck's strength as an officer was intriguing. To say I loathe Beck is to probably understate my feelings, so I was rather thrown by the idea that he was considered the "right" man to come into a stable situation. First, I wouldn't have thought there was anyone back in Cheyenne or anywhere putting too much thought into assignments, and second, I think Beck proved that he wasn't really fit for command anywhere. But your idea is still intriguing to me, because I can see now how it would have been even worse to send him to this Jericho. Okay, this is way more than I like to ever talk about Beck, so I'm stopping now, but I just wanted to let you know that your reasoning got me thinking. :-)
Something tells me its going to get REALLY interesting from here! Can't wait to see what happens next!
First off, congratulations on guessing the graffiti artist's identity!
I'm glad you enjoyed this version of Skylar. I thought she was an interesting character on the show, with the journey she went on, and I had fun writing Skylar-the-freedom-fighter for this story.
You're right about Hawkins. Without his connection to Jake, he didn't get invested in the town either. He saw it spin quickly out of control, watched Gray's rise to power, and has seen what is happening, but knows he can't solve it all himself and does not place it high on his list of priorities. His family is still his main priority in this world, and so is the bigger picture. The interests of the town don't matter to him when it comes down to losing his family, or when compared with the interests of the country as a whole.
Your thoughts on Beck are interesting. Freddie and Jake's main concern in the issue here is that Beck was sent to retrieve the bomb from a stable place, supposedly because he had the finesse required (which is of course debatable, I confess I just took his word on that one, that that's why he was assigned Jericho at least). So, if Beck was who they send to a place they supposedly want to salvage, Jake is interested in what happens in a place that's already so badly ravaged as this Jericho is. Personally, I think, that the Cheyenne government placed finding the bomb as a top priority, as it was important to their continual domination of the remnants of the country, so I think they would be careful who they sent in this case. Whether or not Beck was a suitable choice at all is another question. :)
Thanks so much for taking time to read and comment!
Wow! Just when I think I know what's going to happen, you throw an absolute curveball. I love how you keep me guessing, Penny!
Thanks Sandra!
I've enjoyed getting to write a little mystery in this story, since I haven't done a lot of multi-chaptered stories before.