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Reviewer: SandraDee Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Feb 2010 2:21:09 PM Title: Lightning Round

Wow!  A couple of nice shockers in here.  I totally didn't see the real ghost of April coming back to help Mary (though I am pleased that April's doing so well), nor did I anticipate that Heather's guest would be Twenty-Third.  When she mentioned "T," I guess my mind went to Ted Lewis.  Nice job with the suprises!

And the fight...too funny.

Reviewer: Marzee Doats Signed [Report This]
Date: 03 Jan 2010 5:00:16 PM Title: Lightning Round

This was a fun chapter, Penny, nicely paced with lots of unexpected twists, much as I would expect from a Halloween story.

I thought Eric came off a rather brave in this, as he tried to collect his wits and do battle with a loon.  I liked that he got fed up and called 'April' out, and I thought this paragraph summed him up well:

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Crossing the threshold between the living room and hallway, he peered across the hall. There were no signs of movement in the darkened house. The path to the door was clear, and he could walk out of this horror story in a few seconds. He knew, even as he thought it, that it wasn't an option. His mind was on Mary, and his mother, his brother, their friends. There was no way he could leave them. He would have to find them.

 

The interspersion of the Stanley/Mimi and Kenchy bits were a great idea, very cinematic to have us check in on what was happening in various parts of the Green house and yard.  Mimi's thoughts about Gail's ability to produce any necessary item (a device I am guilty of using more than once) and Stanley's lack of self control when it comes to candy apples were great bits of humor.  And all I can say about poor Kenchy is poor Kenchy.  In his places, I would have rolled over and passed out again, too!

The Mary confrontation with Sunday was interesting, and I liked that Mary knew right away that she wasn't dealing with April's ghost.  I am also glad to hear that April is doing so well in the afterlife.  Thanks for the Castle (and Waitress) shout outs, even if they only amuse me, I appreciate them!

Lastly, I have to agree that T -- Heather's and Sunday's (and therefore April's) brother -- was quite gallant in his rescue of Gail.  :-)



Author's Response:

Thank you~

While the characters have been thrown into a rather...wacky holiday story, I did try to leave their better qualities in tact. So I'm glad Eric's bravery still comes through as he tries to deal with this rather absurd situation.

I had fun writing everyone else's reactions to Sunday or their sudden captivity, and the allusions I got to make were fun too.

Thanks for reading and commenting!

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