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Great chapter! I really like your characterizations, and how you let them grow and develop here.
Jake: I really like this side of him we get to see in your story- the Jake who takes care of other people. We certainly see him doing it a lot on the show, in a big way, but you have also shown us this more day-to-day expression of this side of him. I like your description of Heather through his eyes, and how he realizes the value in the way she sees the world. I like the information we get about his family and his childhood as he chooses the picnic spot, and the effort he goes to to set up the night.
Hawkins: I also really like the side of Hawkins we get to see here. On the one hand, he's business as usual, dedicated to the job. On the other, it's like he's using his talents and people reading skills and insights to sort of play around with the situation, and comment on it. I love the dynamic you've captured between him and Jake- they're so funny teasing each other, but also, developing a sense of respect and comraderie as they work as a team.
Chavez: I liked getting more backstory for him here. He's totally your own creation, with his grief over his family weighing on him and memories of his father, but he also fits well with the character we saw on the show, I think. Goetz's reaction to him was so...Goetz!
Gray and Eric: I really felt the tension as the Gray vs Green conflict bubbled up to the surface here. Gray...on the one hand, I end up feeling sorry for him, because he knows he's messed up and as misguided as he may be, I think he wants to take care of the town. Then he has to go making deals and getting SUVs, just when he has my sympathy! It was good to see Eric standing his ground here- maintaining a voice of reason, of questions, in the town. And, I have to mention, I loved getting this little scene to check back in with the town.
I liked the description in all the scenes, especially the opening one. You captured that early morning feeling perfectly!
Thanks for your review, Penny!
Jake: I think it's only natural that Jakes caring for people that we see on the show extends to the day-to-day with the people he cares for. After his conversation with Heather he does realize the value in the way whe sees the world. I think it's Heather's veiw of the world and her appreciation of the simpler things of life grounds Jake in a way that he's never experienced and gives him hope for the future.
Hawkins: I am really enjoying writing the dynamic between Hawkins and Jake. I think there's alot more to Hawkins than what we saw on the show especially as it relates to his feeling about his family. Jake and Hawkins do respect each other and appreciate what the other brings to the table.
Chavez: Joe is alot of fun to write. I am glad to hear that the way I'm writing it fits in well with the character we saw on the show. I am enjoying writing a character that we know very little about from the show. It gives me chance to give him the personality and backstory that I want to which is alot of fun.
Gray and Eric: While I agree with you on some level that Gray wants to do right by the town I think he cares for himself a little bit more, hence, the deal he made on the side with RJ Land. I saw a slighthly different Eric in the 2nd season than in the first season and tried to capture it in this chapter. He is more assertive now and with Jake off in Cheyenne he has to be play a bigger role in keeping Jake in check.
Thanks again for your review!
Lovely, skyrose!
I love where this is going, and am really enjoying the romance of it all. :-) Heather's shopping list was wonderful, and it's good that she's opening up in how she expresses her affection for Jake.
Hawkins, the perpetual matchmaker is too funny. Love that he gave Jake wine and wineglasses. He's a good friend to arrange for Jake to be able to tell Gail his news the next day.
I'm really looking forward to that proposal scene! Thanks for sharing.
Thanks Marzee!
After all Heather's been through it was a big step to open up to Jake and be honest about her feelings. Not that she the little expressions of affection, such as the the little notes on the shopping list are easy. You can look for more romance in subsequent parts of this chapter.
Hawkins realizes how good Heather is for Jake (and vice versa) that he's willing to do all he can to get them together. I think that Hawkins has some trouble expresses his feelins and I think giving him the wine and arranging the phone call home the next day were gestures of the friendship he feels for Jake that he can't express.
I'm glad you enjoyed this part of Chapter 12.
thank you thank you for the update
love all the romance between jake & heather
looking forward to the next part
Harshini
Thanks for the review harshinib!
I'm glad that you're enjoying the story.
Sigh. There's so much to love about this story, Skyrose! I thoroughly enjoy how you manage to weave so many storylines.
The Jake/Heather scene with Jake fixing Heather cinnamon toast for breakfast was just adorable. It just goes to show that loving someone isn't all about grand gestures 24/7. Sometimes the simplest gestures--like Jake fixing Heather breakfast--can speak volumes. I also thought the teasing between them about Jake being a kept man were so cute.
It also sounds as though Jake is cooking up one fantastic proposal for Heather. I'm really looking forward to the two of them making it official. I think we all know what Heather's answer will be when he finally pops the question!
Hawkins and Jake make a really nice team. I always enjoyed their interaction on the show, and I'm so glad that Hawkins is an integral part of this story. So many people (myself included) get stymmied when it comes to writing his character, but you do a really good job balancing that wry sense of humor we saw from him on the show with his drive to bring down the corrupt people behind the attacks.
I get a bad feeling about this Collins guy. It's interesting that Chavez has a tie to him. I wonder how much the past will cloud their interaction with one another. Chavez obviously knows that there's more to Collins than meets the eye, but does Collins realize that Joe Chavez is anything but a "yes" man?
And Goetz. Good ol' Goetz. He's seeming threatened by Chavez. If I were Joe, I wouldn't turn my back.
It was good to see Eric stand up to Gray's idiocy. I get the sense that Gray is in waaaaay over his head with this little side deal he has going on. He's playing both sides agains the middle, and he's going to end up getting burned in the process. I just hope that he doesn't put Jericho in danger while he's at it. I really liked the strength that I saw in Eric when he confronted Gray.
I'm looking forward to reading more! Thanks for sharing your story with us. :)
SandraDee,
Thanks for your review.
I agree with you. I think the smallest, simplest gestures are much more meaningful. In a way, I think they indicate a level of commitment bigger than the grand gestures.
Jake does have big plans for a proposal a Heather! And I agree, that everyone will know what her answer will be!
Thanks for the compliment about how I write Hawkins. I really wished that they developed the personal side of his character more on the show and the reason why he does what he does. Jake and Hawkins definitely do make a good team. They bring different things into their friendship. In a way I think Jake, humanizes Hawkins while Hawkins helps Jake realize his own self worth.
I think you have hit Chavez's relationship on the head. I believe that Collins may realize a little too late that Chavez is anything but a 'yes' man.
Goetz definitely does see Chavez as a threat and you're right that Joe better not turn his back.
Gray is way over his head only he doesn't quite realize it. He thinks he made a great deal with RJ Land but it's going to come back and bite him.
Thanks again for the review!