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Reviewer: Marzee Doats Signed [Report This]
Date: 15 Nov 2009 6:30:01 PM Title: Chapter 13B

Skyrose,


One of the many things I love about this story (beyond the fact that I prefer your version of Season 2 to what we actually got) is the little bits of humor you infuse into both the adventurous and romantic moments.  Things like:


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Hawkins was spared from answering Chavez when the door opened and Heather walked in. "Hey guys! Sorry we're late, we were –"


"Delayed," Jake abruptly finished as he walked in behind her, glaring at both men, daring them to say anything.


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"Romantic? Jake was romantic?" Gail asked incredulously.


 


I'm glad you take the time to put these things in, they make the story seem more real to me.  Those are just two examples of where this story has really made me smile.



This was a lovely little installment.  It was great to be included on the happy news being announced to Gail and Eric.  Can't wait to see what happens next!

Reviewer: Penny Lane Signed [Report This]
Date: 08 Nov 2009 2:36:40 PM Title: Chapter 13B

I was glad to see the next installment of this story posted!

Great chapter, Skyrose. I love this little reunion via telephone of our Cheyenne team and their loved ones back home. Just as their meetings with each other must provide a bit of respite in their dangerous daily grind, I imagine it's a small but significant relief to have this (few minutes? Half an hour?) of contact with their family and friends back home (or out there, for the Greens and Hawkinses back home).

I liked the glimpse into what's going on back home, the reminder that even though the Jerichoains are not caught up in Cheyenne politics (well, aren't immerse in them, since they are actually experiencing them too, in an interesting way), they are facing their own challenges, and I liked how you showed the way their grief and hurts (Gail's bittersweet musing on her anniversary, for example) are happening alongside things like reaching out to each other, starting things over (the new planting and rebuilding of the town) and of course, Jake and Heather's good news. Sort of a hope/dark times contrast.

I look forward to reading the next part!

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