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Reviewer: AveryB Signed [Report This]
Date: 29 Jun 2009 3:09:05 PM Title: Chapter 1

Skyrose, I like the start of this story very much!  I'm very interested in seeing how Jake gets drawn into Hawkins' world.  The house-to-house searches don't sound very promising.  It was exactly the type of thing that led American colonists to rebel against British rule..oh, almost 250 years before this.  Gray better be careful about what he's promising to the military!

Emily annoys me.  She has no right to interfere with Jake's letter for her own selfish gain.  My thought on this is that if Jake wants to spend time with Emily, he will.  If he's not spending enough time with her to suit her, there's a reason for that.  In general, people make time for the people that are important to them.  That should clue her in.

I'm off to read more!

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