A Jericho Fan Fiction Archive
Penny Lane, I really liked this. I read it a couple of days ago and had been meaning to log in and review but just now found the time. Sorry for the delay.
Oh, Jake, Jake, Jake. Just go after her already! But he wouldn't be Jake if he didn't brood or have deep thoughts, as Mimi put it.
I thought you had an interesting way to weave in the three things that Heather cited before she left for New Bern. I also liked how you did this in a humorous way and let us get a glimpse of other characters behaving in a larger-than-life way.
This was a good read. Thanks for posting it.
Oh, I loved this! I think you've managed to do the impossible: poke fun at the characters and exaggerate them while still keeping them in character.
I'm not even sure where to really start with this, so I think I'll start with the title. Jake Green might be able to see what's going on around him. It might even be making him slightly nauseated and alternately wishing he could have someone, as well. Yet I have to think the title is somewhat ironic. Jake is blind. Doesn't he know the old cliche that opposites attract? Sure he doesn't like light beer, crossword puzzles, or flannel pajamas; but all the couples he, in some way, consulted or observed were opposites. Opposites that complemented one another, the way he and Heather could if he'd not blown that.
Loved the running bits of humor. For example, how the world is literally falling down around them, but they're all taking time out to work on their love lives.
"So, what's on your mind, Jake Green?" asked Mimi, ever the blunt one. She peered across the table at him with a piercing gaze. "You look like you're trying to sort out the origin of the universe or something."
Stanley shot Mimi a warning look, that was probably intended to signal 'No one ever pushes Jake Green when it comes to deep thinking' but Jake didn't feel like keeping up pretenses of happiness tonight, while happy couples danced and kissed and had a grand old time in front of him.
Simply cracked me up! I mean, Jake is so frequently brooding/or presented as engaging in deep thinking in fanfiction, it was funny to see Mimi comment on it and in such a wickedly sarcastic way.
Last, but not least, I can't pass up commenting on Skylar and Dale. Good thing Jake rescued them from their shenanigans of drinking (gasp) light beer.
So I guess with all my rambling, what I'm trying to get at is that I really liked this and thought it was clever how you managed to interpret the challenge prompt in such a unique and enjoyable way.
Thanks for sharing this with us!
Oh my! There is really no one so blind as he who won't see, is there? I mean, oppposites NEVER attract, do they?
Thank you, Penny. This was a hoot. I happen to fall into the Jake is not an imbecile camp, but on this particular matter, I can see him being almost this clueless, poor guy. It aint easy bein' Jake Green, after all.
And this made my day. Priceless.
"Come on Dale, no one's going to come and bust us for it. They have bigger things to worry about."
"That's not what I'm worried about, Skylar." Dale's voice sounded slightly irritated.
"What are you worried about? It won't hurt us to try it, this one time. Haven't you ever wondered what it's like?" She was plaintive, encouraging.
"I didn't need to. I've seen it. You know about my...well, that's what I'm worried about."
"Dale. Just because we try it once doesn't mean we'll end up like our parents. We'll be different."
In a quiet voice now, he answered, "You know I think it should be illegal."
In a gentle voice, she responded, "Nothing's illegal anymore, Dale. We're on our own, and no one can tell us what to do."
Groaning inwardly, knowing he wouldn't be able to resist making sure the orphaned teenagers weren't about to make a dumb mistake they'd regret in the coming months, Jake stepped around the corner.
At the sound of his approach, a shocked Dale and Skylar looked up at him. Skylar was holding a bottle in her hand, and on the ground, between them, was a cardboard case. Jake had to chuckle at the irony.
"Light beer, huh?" he asked.
Thanks for the great read. This was perfect for kicking off the weekend.