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Date: 12 Oct 2013 11:07:50 PM Title: The Traveling Bridge


“There was a bit of a dramatic ballad earlier when I got bogged down thinking about how bad luck seems to hit us every few weeks,” said Eric.

“But then we harmonized about all the times we've pulled through it, and we got to work, and we were just into a sort of retro duet about new paint when you got here,” said Mary with a shrug.

The young woman glanced at Gray. “Did they make some kind of a – a wish?”

“Their life is a musical,” nodded Gray. “Sometimes they cover pop standards but a lot of the time they do original pieces to suit the occasion.” She couldn't say anything. “It's pretty entertaining,” he said with a chuckle.

“Look, look!” the little girl from earlier was tugging on Eric's hand, and pointing towards her. “Look who's here!”

Eric, Mary, the children and Jake all looked at her. “It's you!” exclaimed Eric.

“Welcome back!” smiled Mary. “We haven't seen you in ages!”

They glanced at each other. A tinkly opening chord came from somewhere in the night. Eric began to sing. “Everything you left is so different now,” A guitar seemed to have joined the mix.

You've got questions, like why? And how?” chimed in Mary.


Okay, this story was worth reading for just this part.  I mean, I like all the different versions of Jake, don't get me wrong (especially the one that has Parcheesi dates with his mom), but Eric and Mary living in Broadway Musical Land is hilarious.


I think I like Skylar's story the best (okay, tied with Allison's) if only because she made a great choice to set herself up as town protector…. And who knew that Jericho was that important to Skylar?

Author's Response:

Thanks Marzee!

I had so much fun coming up with the wishes in this one, and I tried to make them somewhat based on things Skylar might observe (like music appreciation) or guess at (like based on seeing someone dividing their time between obligations with a stressed look on their face).

I'm glad this story worked for you. I think Skylar was trying to sort out her feelings about home and the outside world, and though she's wanting to still venture out there, her (comparatively) secure home base does mean a lot to her. Kind of the same but also opposite to Dale's story, she's declaring her own adulthood I think.  

Reviewer: Marzee Doats Signed [Report This]
Date: 12 Oct 2013 10:20:59 PM Title: Party Crasher

Quote: Dale sighed. “There's being a good friend and there's being stupid, getting yourself killed.”

I think this was the perfect subject matter for Dale to write about, and this quote really kind of sums up Dale.  He's a pragmatic kind of guy, and he knows when to move on. 

Quote: Skylar looked unimpressed. “Why are you so sure nothing will survive?”

Dale looked sadly at her. “I know how it is to want to stop it. To think you can wish it away, when someone dies. But you can't. The only sane thing to do is to move on, and get as far the hell away from here as we can.”


This also sounds like Dale to me.  He's a little guarded, probably because he's lost so much, and it isn't like he had a lot to spare, but he's also doing the best he knows how to just survive.  And isn't that what he was doing all along on Jericho?

I also found it interesting that Dale writes a story where he and Skylar go their separate ways. (Okay, it wasn't for long, but it was still an interesting choice).  They were both so mature – I think he's trying to tell Emily something here…. "We're grown up," or "Do you really think you can give homework assignments to the man who controls your access to personal care products?"

Lastly, I just have to give a shout out for Darcy.  She was a good leader in this, and it left me wondering how Dale might have come to know her (through Allison, obviously, but since we don't see them interact on screen in Jericho there is still a lot of possibility).  As we all know, Dale is motherless and while Gail is the go-to choice for mothering him when he needs it, he left her out of his story and put the mother of a friend in instead.  And made her pretty bad ass.  I like the choice.


Thanks for sharing!  Our very own little bit of World War Z Jericho.

Author's Response:

Thanks for your review Marzee!

I really liked writing this exploration of death and moving on for Dale, and I'm glad the subject matter and his dealing with it came across as well-suited. It was fun to go zombie-story dark for this part, though I confess it was also nice that it was in a fictional context too.

I think you're right that Dale's trying to tell Emily and maybe the older generation in general something about himself and his experiences, though I think also he's coming to terms with their differences and sense of community and responsibility for himself too. And not just the elders but maybe also with Skylar, hence this separation story (though I also think maybe, since Skylar did this too in her story, they both decided that if they were going to put themselves out there, they weren't going to put their significant other out there too, so it has sort of a practical narrative purpose as well).

I'm glad you liked Darcy's appearance in this story. It was so much fun to write her as a badass zombie fighter, it seemed to me like a perfect role for her, though of course she doesn't get to show this side to other people much. I like to think, as you said, that Dale has gotten to know Darcy a little through Allison, and while I'm sure he hasn't really gotten to see the hardcore Darcy we've only gotten glimpses of with our omniscient view, I like to imagine he's used his people-observing skills to pick up on a possibility or maybe a tiny bit of kindred-spirithood. I don't think Dale could situate Gail in this story, or at least not in this grieving but also ruthless fighter mom role, maybe actually because of the motherly role you pointed out that Gail has had in his life. Interesting for me to think about so thanks for pointing it out.

Thanks again for reading and commenting!

Reviewer: Marzee Doats Signed [Report This]
Date: 31 Jul 2013 12:32:45 AM Title: Monsterhood and Other Growing Pains

Oh, Penny, I really enjoyed this.  What a great way to have Allison process the Hawkins family secrets without betraying anything.  I especially found it interesting how she's this demon slayer (a la Buffy) who kills the bad guys left and right, but none of the demons seemed to be a version of Sarah Mason. 

I also like Allison's journey of acceptance in Jericho.  I wish we had seen this come to fruition on the show! Glad too, that we got to see Hawkins and Darcy as caring parents... and as two people who ultimately love one another.  If any one would know that, it should be their kid.

I thought the part with Heather and her mysterious paramour was hilarious.  I really hope that it's okay if I assume that was Beck.  If you didn't mean it to be, then don't tell me.  ;-)

Lastly, I must confess that I was ready to be angry with Gray (and not surprised to find out) that he was King of the Demons.... but you went and Mad Eye Moody'd him, and now I have to feel bad for my unkind thoughts.

Nicely done!


Author's Response:

Thanks Marzee!

This one was a lot of fun for me to write, since I both love writing Allison as a main character and grew up with Buffy as a role model. It seemed to me like Allison would identify with Buffy's strong protective instincts and it was fun to come up with supernatural scenarios she could protect the town from. You're right, it's totally her way of dealing with the recent events of her personal narrative, and I didn't really think about why Sarah Mason doesn't really appear, but considering it now, I think in a way the whole story is about Sarah Mason. And on the other hand, it isn't at all about her, because more important to Allison is the personal change she underwent after being attacked by and killing Sarah Mason. Kind of like, Sarah is a catalyst and does have responsibility, but Sarah the person is not really important to Allison, she's just a person and not as key as Allison's personal choices and journey. Also though, she maybe realizes she shouldn't put in quite so many obvious details, since she is being pretty risky submitting this story to Emily, so she's leaving out the part she feels is most incriminating. 

As for Heather's paramour, I will say he is as Beck as anyone wants him to be.

I'm glad you had a change of heart about Gray. He's just about as hapless around the supernatural as the other townspeople I guess. Allison probaby had fun characterizing him as King of the monsters for a while, but then it is a story about figuring out the monsters we all have inside us, in a way, so she had to come around too.

Thanks again for reading!


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