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I was happy to see that this was posted. I really enjoyed reading it. I like how you captured the uneasiness of the townspeople and Heather's longing for simpler days. I really liked the insight into Jake and Heather that you provided by telling us their thoughts. Their conversation, I thought, was very much in character. My favorite part was:
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“I--I’ve heard stories about Jonah Prowse. Don’t suppose it would do any good to warn you to be careful. This town needs you.” An involuntary shudder ran through her. “And I don’t want to see you get hurt.” The tiniest smile formed at the corner of her lips as she leaned forward and investigated the cut on his cheek, the result of a run in with Mitch Cafferty the day before. “Well, worse.”
Jake’s teeth grazed his bottom lip as he studied her. She was completely guileless, a quality that alternately attracted and scared the hell out of him. It had been a long time since someone cared about his well-being, since someone thought what he did mattered in a good way. “I’m not going to get myself killed.”
The fact that Jake didn’t promise to not get hurt didn’t escape Heather’s attention, but she would take what she could get. “You better not, Mister. Or else.”
“Or else what?” he chuckled.
Or else I’ll have one less person who inspires me.
Or else your parents’ hearts will break, and mine might, too.
“Or else I’ll have to find someone else whose ass I can kick in darts.”
I am looking forward to Part 2!
Thank you so much, Skyrose! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. :) Those early episodes of Jericho were an inspiration to me when writing this. I remembered the easy comaraderie the two shared, the way they both did little things that surprised the other, and how Jake was *always* injured. LOL.
Very nice start, Sandra! I can't wait to see how this tradition evolves over the next few years. :-)
Thank you, Marzee! I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
I fell hard for these two from episode one. She is what he deserves and needs.
Heather gives Jake unconditional respect and the look in her eyes speaks of her pride in him. Jake needs someone that sees the man he has become not the boy he used to be. I hope you plab to finish this story because it was wonderfully delivered.
Thank you for sharing!
Sid
Thank you for reading and commenting, Sid! I appreciate it!
Like you, I think Heather looks at Jake and sees the man he is now--the man who is selfless, cares more for others than for himself. She does give him unconditional respect, which cannot be said for everyone. She brings out the best in him, and in some ways, I think he's brought out the best in her by making her more confident in her abilities.
Don't worry! I do plan to finish the story. It's just going to be a three-parter. The second part is already completed, and the third is a good portion of the way there.
Thank you again! And welcome to the site, by the way!
I was so excited to see that you'd written a Halloween story, Sandra!
As usual, you've done a great job characterizing both Jake and Heather. In this case, you've brought me back to that specific moment in season one- right after Mitchell's jail break in the middle of the town's makeshift Halloween party.
I love that atmosphere you've captured here, that uneasiness the townspeople are experiencing, the almost dazed way they're having to face a completely new world, and the humour they use to deal with all of this.
The dialogue is spot on, I think. Very witty in some parts, and showing exactly where these characters are, emotionally. I think this is my favourite part:
The fact that Jake didn’t promise to not get hurt didn’t escape Heather’s attention, but she would take what she could get. “You better not, Mister. Or else.”
“Or else what?” he chuckled.
Or else I’ll have one less person who inspires me.
Or else your parents’ hearts will break, and mine might, too.
“Or else I’ll have to find someone else whose ass I can kick in darts.”
Great start to the story, and I can't wait to read more! Thanks for sharing!
Thank you, Penny Lane! I've enjoyed delving into a different time in the Jericho universe. I always felt like there could have been a plethora of small scenes like this to have taken place, so I thought it would be fun to revisit this time, albeit briefly.
I think that many people tend to use humor to deal with the changes/challenges in their lives. Sometimes when faced with an obstacle, you either have to laugh about it or cry about it. Granted, sometimes the humor can be dark humor.
Thanks again for your comments!